第六篇,英语小日记.那位高人随便看看吧,都回答都给分看看哪里错了Today I found time was a cruel thing.Whoever you are,time always goes on.It won’t stay to wait for somebody.You can’t use anything to exchange time.Time is

第六篇,英语小日记.那位高人随便看看吧,都回答都给分看看哪里错了Today I found time was a cruel thing.Whoever you are,time always goes on.It won’t stay to wait for somebody.You can’t use anything to exchange time.Time is
第六篇,英语小日记.那位高人随便看看吧,都回答都给分
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Today I found time was a cruel thing.Whoever you are,time always goes on.It won’t stay to wait for somebody.You can’t use anything to exchange time.Time is also a fair thing.Although you have a lot of money or you enjoy high reputation,time won’t leave them more.Today I found I hadn’t enough time.Although I have 50-day holiday,but I found I had a lot of things to do.I had a lot of homework to do and I had
something necessary to do.
A year later,I have grown riper.And I learned much more things and got new life.I had build up a idea.I wanted to learn French next term!

第六篇,英语小日记.那位高人随便看看吧,都回答都给分看看哪里错了Today I found time was a cruel thing.Whoever you are,time always goes on.It won’t stay to wait for somebody.You can’t use anything to exchange time.Time is
Today I found time (is) a cruel thing.Whoever you are,time always goes on.It won’t stay to wait for (anybody) .You can’t use anything to exchange (for) time.Time is also a fair thing.Although you have a lot of money or you enjoy high reputation,time won’t leave them more.Today I found I (didn't have)enough time.Although I (had) 50-day holiday,I found I had a lot of things to do.I had a lot of homework and necessary things to do.
A year (went by),I (had) grown riper.And I (had) learned much more things and got new life.I had an idea that I wanted to learn French in next term!

Today I found time was a cruel thing
把“was” 换成“is”,如果要强调时间残忍这个客观性，要用一般现在时。
Whoever you are，time always goes on
把“always”换成“still” 用always不太通顺。
It won’t stay to wait for somebody.
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Today I found time was a cruel thing
把“was” 换成“is”,如果要强调时间残忍这个客观性，要用一般现在时。
Whoever you are，time always goes on
把“always”换成“still” 用always不太通顺。
It won’t stay to wait for somebody.
改成It won't stay for somebody，原句重复了。
Today I found I hadn’t enough time. 也有点问题。
but I found I had a lot of things to do。
为什么用过去式 had ？不是你过去发现你有许多事做么？用 had 代表，你过去发现你过去的过去有许多事做。那也该用完成时啊，还得把do换成done,也不通顺啊，直接把had改成have
I had build up a idea
a改成an
(我英语不太好，也不知道对不对）

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需要改的地方，大致这样：
1/Today I found that time is a cruel thing.(这里用一般现在时最合适，表事实。)
2/It won’t stop to wait for anybody.否定，anybody更好，适合语义。
3/(去掉you)enjoy a high reputation,后面没看懂你想说什么。
4/奥，懂了，留给...

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需要改的地方，大致这样：
1/Today I found that time is a cruel thing.(这里用一般现在时最合适，表事实。)
2/It won’t stop to wait for anybody.否定，anybody更好，适合语义。
3/(去掉you)enjoy a high reputation,后面没看懂你想说什么。
4/奥，懂了，留给更多是吧。可以这样：there is nothing more...
5/a ***holiday
6/but I have so many homework and other necessary things to do.
7/riper 最好用mature :i will be mature one year later.
8/后面时态不对,将来时最好
9/idea不要build 这样：I have had a greatful plan in my mind to learn F...
不知道你在上几年级，一点建议望参考。
整体想法很不错，就是以后注意下时态。
单词的应用就看你以后的学习了。
写日记是个好习惯，加油！

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我也不大会耶！还是请英语老师帮你搞定吧！

time is （真理）
no matter whoever you are
it don't
for anyone
time is also fair

I have grown riper. And I learned much more things and got new life时态没统一
i want to do