帮我看一下这篇英语文章有没有什么错误,请大家帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有没有什么错误?有的话请大家帮我改正,Hello Everyone,Today,it’s my great honor to stand here to take part in the election campa

帮我看一下这篇英语文章有没有什么错误,请大家帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有没有什么错误?有的话请大家帮我改正,Hello Everyone,Today,it’s my great honor to stand here to take part in the election campa
帮我看一下这篇英语文章有没有什么错误,
请大家帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有没有什么错误?有的话请大家帮我改正,
Hello Everyone,
Today,it’s my great honor to stand here to take part in the election campaign for being a member of our school’s radio station.
First,I’ve been learning English for many years,I like English .I often listen to English music or see English films.And I think I have this kind of ability,you know,I think that I’m equal to this position.First of all,I want to further training my oral English.And I will be very happy if we can share happiness,listen to English songs,learn English together when you hear my voice.Meanwhile,broadcast not only will make everyone relaxed ,but also will improve my English level,therefore,campaigning for this position is undoubtedly the best choice.
I believe I can make radio station more perfect when I join in it.I hope you can give me this chance.I will do my best.Thank you.

帮我看一下这篇英语文章有没有什么错误,请大家帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有没有什么错误?有的话请大家帮我改正,Hello Everyone,Today,it’s my great honor to stand here to take part in the election campa
我的修改体现在文笔和逻辑上,请笑纳啊
Hello Everyone,
Thank you all for providing me with this excellent opportunity,with my great honor,to stand on this stage,for an election campaign to be a member of our campus radio station.
First of all,I have been proactively learning English for quite a few years as I love English very much.Likewise,I often listen to a series of English music and enjoy watching well-known English films.As I strongly believe that I have this kind of born-in interest and ability,I think I am quite qualified for this position.
Furthermore,I would like to have a continuous training on my oral English.I will be extremely happy if we have a chance to share happiness and sadness together,listen internationally-wide English song together,while you could hear my nice and sweet voice.Meanwhile,it is believed that broadcast will not only make everyone relaxed,but also will improve our English proficiency,especially the listening and oral skills.Therefore,campaigning for this position is undoubtedly the best choice for me and for you guys.
I strongly believe that,with my effort and your warm support,we could make radio station more perfect after I join in it.I hope you could give me this chance and I guarantee that I will put all my effort to the sustainable development of radio station onwards.Thank you very much.

第六行的First of all应改为Then
我认为I will do my best 改为I will try my best to do this job更好

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