帮我修改我这篇英语百字短文who am i1．帮我找找有没有不准的用词,不恰当的句子,还有语法错误尤其是第三第四句,我觉得别扭.2．最好能帮我在想几个和第三到第六句类似的句子.3．我不太自

帮我修改我这篇英语百字短文who am i1．帮我找找有没有不准的用词,不恰当的句子,还有语法错误尤其是第三第四句,我觉得别扭.2．最好能帮我在想几个和第三到第六句类似的句子.3．我不太自
帮我修改我这篇英语百字短文
who am i
1．帮我找找有没有不准的用词,不恰当的句子,还有语法错误
尤其是第三第四句,我觉得别扭.
2．最好能帮我在想几个和第三到第六句类似的句子.
3．我不太自信,高一写成这样能交上去么?是不是不好吖……
I’m a student,a normal student.
I’m not gold in other’s eyes,but I’d like to be myself truly.
I once sought to be a top student,but I failed in an exam.
I once made myself learn history carefully,but I kept sleeping in the next class.
I once wandered to see a beautiful rainbow,but the stream came first.
I once dreamed my colorful happy future,but I had to face the boring classes the next morning
Maybe,now,the life for me is just like sailing in the roaring waves,climbing up a high snow mountain,and walking across a large desert.I have to struggle for my own future,and I always believed that the peace ocean after the stream is the most fascinating,the view I see on the top of the mountain is the most beautiful,and the first oases I find in the desert is
最后几个词是the most verdant

帮我修改我这篇英语百字短文who am i1．帮我找找有没有不准的用词,不恰当的句子,还有语法错误尤其是第三第四句,我觉得别扭.2．最好能帮我在想几个和第三到第六句类似的句子.3．我不太自
恩,能写成这样算你有水平拉,我也是高一的,自愧不如啊.
I’m not gold in other’s eyes,but I’d like to be myself truly 你是不是想说 我在别人眼里不是天才[金子],可是我只想做我自己,或许可以改成:Maybe i am not the best in others'[注意,这里是用,是”别人的”]minds,but i just want to be myself truly.还有就是你下文写的是你和学习,这里可以的话还可以加上：and i will keep working harder and harder.
once dreamed my colorful happy future,but I had to face the boring classes the next morning .后半句不妨写成：but i had to face the fail in my life.
结尾兼有长征和 海的梦 的调调,佩服,

I'm a student who is an ordinary student.
I’m not gold in other’s eyes,(不知你想说什麼).
I once wish to become a top student
but I kept sleeping next class
but I had to face the boring classe...

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I'm a student who is an ordinary student.
I’m not gold in other’s eyes,(不知你想说什麼).
I once wish to become a top student
but I kept sleeping next class
but I had to face the boring classes next morning
and I always believed -and I always believe
the view I see -the view I saw
Cheer up! 加油

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和高一学生水平差不多，但是和一般大学生相比，差距太大。